by BaldMerkin
13 and 14 feel more like you were trying to wrap it up in a lengthy, wordy way
Otherwise it was brilliant and you could easily have carried on in the previous manner for ages
How did the end turn so blatantly into "everything become so much better embracing modern societal beliefs in no time at all turning the world into a paradise where everyone clapped!" It just kept getting more obvious, like good for hoping so but it just felt extremely hamfisted and disingenuous.