All Comments on 'Birthday Pool Party Ch. 44'

I'm enjoying the heck out of this tale, but I'm hoping when it gets to Book 2, somehow Lexi is written out; she's just a bull in the china shop.

Thank you for Hazel's back-story. The context really enriched your story.

Great Chapter as always Witty! 5 Stars! I love the continuing development of the characters and they way you write the development is so natural and gives off a vibe of reality, making the characters seem real. Bravo! I can't waot for the next chapter.

Well played and great background info and fun times with the added drama. Such a fun red. Cheers

I love the way you write, the way you describe Hazel’s insecurities is so believable, so looking forward to more. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Another fantastic entry! Looking forward to what you have next for us!

After 44 chapters, I couldn't tell you which is my favorite but this one is a masterpiece. You covered a lot of ground and all of that backstory and internal dialogue enriches the saga. Ending this chapter on such a crescendo was a perfect way to wrap it up. Kayla is definitely enticed by the prospect of performing on video; that could be a whole spin-off of its own.

I agree that Kayla definitely wants, needs and desires to be performing on video with several partners. She wants the fun and attention that would have. Cheers

44 chapters in, and I'm starting to wonder if I could ever write a saga like this. I had a bit of fleeting inspiration not long ago, specifically, in the form of a dream about what would have happened if I asked the girl who was my senior prom date out 6 months sooner. I was kind of like Ian in high school, but also a halfway decent athlete. Makes me wonder how that POV might read. Very much enjoying the story, Witty - looking forward to the next one.

@NotSomeBubba I'm glad you're enjoying the story! I agree, Lexi has a lot of growing up to do. She uses her brattiness to keep others at a distance.

@AccelarVester Thank you! I love filling out the story, and I hope you enjoyed Hazel's back story.

@TheJoker33 I love your comments! Thanks for saying the story feels real!

@Qwer12 Nice to hear from you! Happy to hear you enjoyed the read!

@Woodencav Thanks for the five stars, and I'm glad Hazel's emotions seem real.

@CaptainFrostBite Thanks! I hope to have Chapter 45 done soon!

@LazyDiogenes Kayla performing could definitely be a spin off! I appreciate that you enjoy the 44 chapters!

@Qwer12 I love to see you commented twice! And yeah, Kayla may be on video soon; after all, Stephanie did promise Ian!

@Anonymous Glad you're enjoying the story! If you want to write, you should! Write for yourself, and don't worry what others think. I know that's hard, since I love seeing positive comments. Still, ultimately it's your enjoyment that will keep you writing.

@Anonymous. "...I'm starting to wonder if I could ever write a saga like this." There's only one way to find out. Why 6 months? Why not 5 or 4? What sport did you play? Or was it not school-related like Golden Gloves or Highland Games.

@Qwer12. I wonder if Kayla how would feel if non-Slut Sisters watched her do her thing like Josh, Stephanie, or Dan. Even if they sung her praises, would she feel self-conscious or flattered?

@LazyDiogenes. I'd like to see Britney watch Kayla do what she does and say that she'd think Kayla would make a hell of a performer because Kayla is that talented.

@CaptainFrostBite. I always say the same thing, even more so when Witty says that a chapter is going to be longer than usual.

@Woodencav. I totally agree with you. Witty didn't just describe Hazel's insecurities, he went over Marcia's insecurities too!

@Qwer12. The drama is always around the corner for the Slut-Sisters. Whether it was the secret of the harem going public, the kidnapping, and so on. It seems they can't get a break.

@TheJoker33. I wholly concur. When it comes to Book 2 or a brand new story, I hope Witty does more deep character dives because they will be greatly appreciated.

@Accelarvester. Indeed it has!

@NotSomeBubba. I admit that Lexi isn't the most refined when it comes to the Slut-Slsters. But Lexi the Bull has her sisters' backs when it counts, just look at the kidnapping episode or way before that when Kayla was assaulted.

@Witty. I agree with the fellow fans that the introspection scenes were masterful. I also found the money discussion with Marcia's parents was interesting too. Other than the YouInvest deal, it seemed like a day at the office could be summed up with the phrase, "Steven is very good at money." So to see him break down how lottery winnings are distributed, making sure taxes are paid, and the like shows that Steven isn't just another a guy who knows how to fuck. The same goes with the medical appointment. When you watch TV shows, it's usually something that the guy is in the waiting room for, is late for, or doesn't show up at all. I'm not saying that Steven would do that but it is what we expect from a stand-up guy like him. The stop at the chicken restaurant was a nice touch to show the cravings coming to the surface.

@kintsukuroi Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the introspection scenes, as well as the scene with Steven talking about the lottery winnings. And you're right, Steven would never just sit in the waiting room. He took time off from work to make sure he was there for Hazel. :)

@everyone Chapter 45 has been submitted to Literotica. It is scheduled to go live on Sunday.

Thanks for reading!

-Witty

I've been a loyal reader since the beginning and it never has been boring.

I have always said you are a truly gifted writer and I stand by that..on to the next chapter.

Rj_1954