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Click here"She wanted to hook-up."
"Doesn't she know you have a girlfriend?"
"She knows we're together."
"Then how come she thinks she can get you? What did you tell her?"
"Diana, stop!"
She pulled out of him entirely and grabbed his phone. Kevin turned around, still dazed.
"What the fuck? Stop messing with my phone!" He shouted. "What the hell are you doing?"
"I'm giving that boyfriend-stealing ho a piece of my mind."
"What? Stop!" Kevin lunged at her, but she scrambled out of bed and kept typing.
"Stop!"
"There," she gave him the mobile.
He searched through the messages. "Where the hell is Ginger's message?"
"The whore got purged from your phone."
"Awesome. Very mature, Diana."
"Fuck mature!" She grabbed his wrists and dragged him back to the bed. "I was gonna give you a birthday treat today. But now I don't feel like it anymore."
"Ten seconds ago you didn't even remember it was my birthday."
Diana pushed him on the bed and grabbed his legs, forcing them apart. Still standing near the bed, she stretched his legs to a full split.
"Stop, Diana," he said in a quiet voice, "that hurts."
"You're hurting me, Kevin, talking with that girl."
"I'm sorry."
"If you thought about me half as much as I think about you this wouldn't have happened," she said.
Kevin couldn't figure if he should laugh or tear his hair out from frustration. "In what world do you ever think of me or do anything I want?"
"I took my Prince Albert out because you said it hurts your throat."
"You took it out only because I couldn't deep-throat with it in the way."
"Because I didn't want to hurt your delicate throat."
"Right. I guess I'm just selfish," Kevin closed his eyes. Arguing with Diana was as fun as arguing with a wall, and just as productive.
Still splitting his legs, Diana aligned the head of her cock with his ravaged pink hole and pushed. The head stretched the round muscle of his asshole as it quickly dug in.
"Ohhh, Baby, your ass is just the best," she purred. "Every time I'm angry with you I just think of it and I ain't angry no more. It's like my cock melts in there."
She pushed and claimed him once more, on his back, legs spread wide like a ballet dancer. She pulled almost all the way out until only the head was lodged in his hugging tunnel then proceeded to pound him. Diana set a relaxed pace, but each time she was near bottoming she thrust with gusto, jolting his body and extracting an 'Oof' from his lungs.
Kevin's sphincter went tight around the base of Diana's cock like a cock ring. He could feel her cock throb in response deep inside his ass. She let go of his legs.
"You just love feeling me inside you, don't you?"
His cock was stiff and already leaking. There was no denying her effect on him. "Yeah."
"Show me how much."
Kevin wiggled his ass around, just like Diana trained him to do. She stopped moving. He opened his eyes and saw her standing above him, smiling, with her eyes closed. He hooked his legs around her ass and pushed his ass against her cock.
"Squeeze my cock with your ass," she asked quietly.
Kevin clenched as hard as he could. His smooth walls tried to squeeze the milk out of her hard cock. She gave a sharp intake as pleasure hit her.
"God, Kevin, I love you baby."
Kevin clenched again, and Diana couldn't take it anymore. She started thrusting hard and quick. Her balls slapped his buttocks at a fast pace. Slap, slap, slap, churning the love juice inside them. She fell on his lithe body and hugged him tight as her orgasm hit. Diana stayed on top of him, lodged deep inside as her balls emptied their load deep into his bowels.
"Ah, Ah, Ah... Fuuuuuuck."
The hot cream drenched his insides, and Kevin drew a deep breath. He unhooked his legs and pushed her gently, but she wouldn't move. Diana stayed inside him for a long time. She sometimes loved hugging him and staring into his eyes in the post-orgasmic afterglow.
"I love you, Kevin," she whispered. "I love you so much I sometimes feel I might explode. I would die if some girl took you from me." She kissed Kevin on each eye. "You're so perfect."
Someone knocked on the bedroom door. "Can I come in?" Helen said.
"Sure," Diana huffed.
Kevin was panting. Still, he was aware enough to panic. "What? No! No! Helen, don't come in."
"Okay." There was a short pause. "Wait, are you two doing it right now?"
Diana answered with her devilish laughter.
"What the fuck is wrong with your brain, Diana?" Helen screamed. "One of these days I'm gonna have you hospitalized."
"Chill," Diana withdrew from her lover's ass. She slapped Kevin's butt. "Go on, Baby Butt, open the door; let's see what the bitch wants."
Kevin stumbled out of bed, put on his training pants on and opened the door.
"Hey," Helen smiled at him, and he stared at her mouth agape.
"What the fuck?" Diana said.
Helen usually wore her hair in a long braid or wildly loose when she was at home. The golden Rapunzel-like locks now lay sleek and chic. Every hair rested in its right place, and each one shone. She wore makeup, which concealed most of her scar, and she painted her lips blood red, in stark contrast to her pale skin. Completing the new apparel was an elegant red sleeveless evening dress. Classically cut, with no cleavage. She was much curvier than Diana. However, unlike her little sister who was a regular slob, Helen jogged and exercised her body with the same boot camp discipline that she applied everywhere else. Helen thus maintained a slim hourglass silhouette, and her dress clung to that gorgeous shape in all the right places. Kevin thought the result was dangerous. It could cleave the male heart in two.
"Wow," he said.
"Diana, I need to borrow your earrings. The long ones; the ones that look like feathers."
"Are you going out?" Diana said.
"No, she's going hunting alligators," Kevin said. "Of course, she's going out."
"Where to?" Diana ignored him.
"A restaurant," Helen said.
"Like for a business deal?"
"No."
"Like... Like on a date?"
"Yes."
"Like with a man?"
"Like, Diana, can I get those earrings?"
Diana closed one eye, "Hmmm.... I don't know where they are."
"I do," Kevin said. "Closet, upper left corner. I'll get them."
"Are you actually going out on a date, Helen?" Diana said.
"Why is it so inconceivable?"
"Maybe because I can count the number of dates you've gone to in the past ten years on the one hand?" Diana lifted her hand and started counting fingers. "One, two, three... Zero. Actually, I don't need hands."
Helen shrugged.
"How did you two hook up?"
"On 'Match' dating site."
"Since when do you start using a dating site?"
"What's with the Spanish Inquisition, Diana?"
"It's a bit of a shock, that's all. Is that a new dress?"
"Yeah. What do you think?" Helen lifted her hands.
Diana motioned a so, so with her palm. "The Victorian look... Meh... Not my jam. Guys like to get a sneak peek at the girls, to know what they're getting."
"Okay, so you wouldn't wear it, but how does it look?" Kevin noticed that Helen's lower lip trembled a little; a chink in her armor that he learned to recognize. Her nonchalant demeanour was the same as her tough bitch act. Just an act.
"I mean, with you it's probably best if you won't show skin," Diana said. "Because of the scars and all. It's Okay, I guess." She twisted her mouth.
"Helen, I think you look-" Kevin started.
"You're not allowed to compliment girls that aren't your girlfriend," Diana lifted her hand and cut him in mid-sentence. "We've been through that before."
"Sorry." Kevin picked the earrings and stopped by his work desk. He quickly drew a big 'Like' button sketch on a notebook page, lifted it behind Diana's back and mimed pressing it a couple of times.
Helen smiled and then to Kevin's surprise, blushed. Diana turned her head, but Kevin already lowered the notebook.
"Oh, by the way, Kevin, this is for you," Helen gave him a red envelope, blushed again and hastened out of the bedroom.
"Get your ass cleaned. Get dressed," Diana said, "we're going out too."
"To the club?"
"To an old friend of mine. What's in that envelope she gave you?"
"Why are you always so mean to Helen?"
"What did she give you?"
"She cares for you. Why are you always so mean to her? It's like you hate her."
"What's in that envelope?"
"She didn't need your opinion on the dress; she was just fishing for a compliment. Even I understood that, and I'm a guy. Was it that hard to say something nice? She looked stunning, by the way; you really had to put an effort there to say it's just okay."
"I'll kick your ass if you say that my sister looked stunning."
"Helen looked stunning," he nodded. "Hot and classy."
"Watch it."
"She looked super amazing, and you were super mean, Diana. You live in her house, at her expense. She lends you money all the time, which you never bother to return. She does everything you ask her to. She-"
"She should!" Diana snarled. "Half of everything she owns is mine, anyway."
"I kinda doubt that."
"How do you think she became a VP in a big-firm, and how do you think she came to own all these apartments?"
"I'm willing to bet it has nothing to do with you."
Diana's face turned crimson. "She sold our mom's old house. Our mom. Half of that house was mine, and that's how she got her initial fortune. She never consulted me."
"Probably a good thing."
Diana searched for something to throw at him, and when she found nothing, she threw a pillow. It didn't have the desired effect. "Shut the front door, Baby Butt. You're pissing me off."
"You're hardly a garden of roses yourself, Princess."
"You want a piece of me?"
"I want you to stop treating me like I don't count. You can't just tell people to come in when we're having sex, and you can't send a video of me getting butt-fucked on the phone. Yeah, I saw that. Stop making me feel like I'm an idiot. Stop calling me names and stop humiliating me. You're not better than me, Diana. You're selfish, and you're cruel, and not just to me; to everyone around you."
"I've had it up to here with you, Kevin!" She roared.
"Same here."
"Great!"
"Maybe we need a break, Diana?"
"Maybe I need to break your arms and legs?" She jumped naked off the bed and was on him in a second. She grabbed both his arms and pinned him to the closet door.
"Let go of me!"
"Never talk to me like that!"
"Okay, sorry."
"Say it like you mean it."
"I'm sorry that I called you selfish and cruel."
"I don't give a fuck about that. We don't need a break."
"Okay!"
Her lips sought his. He tried to move his head, but she let go of his arms, grabbed his head and kissed him deeply. When she pulled away, her eyes were full of tears. "Asshole! Why did you have to say we need a break? You scare me, Kevin."
"You scare me, Diana. One minute you're about to skull-fuck me and the next you just wanna fuck me. I can't keep up with you."
"I'm sorry that I scared you." She nuzzled his neck, then kissed his lips again. "But when you say stuff like 'I'm gonna leave you'... Never say that shit again."
"Jesus. Okay, I won't. We don't need a break."
She hugged him tightly and breathed him in. Inhaling deep. "I know I'm not the perfect person, but I'm trying to be a good girlfriend. I honestly am."
"Then try to think about how I feel every once in a while, Diana."
"What's in that stupid envelope she gave you?"
"How the fuck should I know? You didn't give me a chance to open it." Kevin opened the red envelope and read the note.
'Kevin,
A fresh year needs a fresh start.
Desmond Tutu said that anger is like a dunk room. Anger closes the windows and the curtains. But the sun is shining outside, and there is fresh air outside. To get that fresh air, you have to get up and open that window and draw the curtains apart.
We are only human. As humans, we let each other down. We abuse trust. We break hearts. We make mistakes. I have made my fair share of mistakes, and I sincerely ask for your forgiveness.
I hope this opens the window just a little.
Happy Birthday,
Helen.'
Enclosed with the letter was a slip of paper. When he pulled it out and read its words, he stared, and then started to laugh. It was a voucher for a ten-session course of Krav Maga.
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Happiness is rare. It's a delicate golden string that shimmers at the corner of your eye. One wrong move, one wrong touch and it can slip through your fingers. Sometimes happiness is a new hope when you feel a change is coming your way.
Helen felt that happiness as she checked herself in the mirror for the hundredth time. Happy with the result, for the first time since her injury, she blew her image a kiss and wished herself luck. Then, heart thumping but without looking back, she left the house for her first ever date.
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To be continued...
Well, you're at the end of chapter 3, and I'm guessing that if you slogged all the way to this point, you like the story so far. So be kind, and leave a message here or to me, or at least punch those stars. I like to hear people opinion about my work, even the criticism (it helps me improve).
Chapter 4 will be posted in a day or two.
- COMMENTS
Anonymous4 months agoIt's a truly amazing story ... but my greatest fear is there's no way everyone lives happily ever after. And I DO want them all to live happily ever after.... even Diana!
Anonymous7 months agoFirst ever comment on one of these things. Came for the horny, stayed for the gold. No honestly though, I've reread this series like 8 times and every single time I finish reading I curse at the world for not having this be more popular/mainstream. I also keep falling in love and sometimes relating to the "quotes" you put in the chapters. You're incredibly talented and good at what you do and I really hope you return and drop another masterpiece
1smartguy4no1about 1 year agoYour writing is riveting, and that's the truth. Yesterday I was late to work because I just had to finish the chapter, and then had to forcibly put my phone down and go to work like an adult is supposed to do. Lol. I love your writing, please don't stop. You're very, very good at it, and it's truly a pleasure losing myself in your words.
Anonymousover 1 year agoI LOVE this story, and even as a straight tough guy, I wouldn’t mind Helen overpowering me a time or twenty. One bit, but a serious one. Marines NEVER abide the term “ex-Marine.” Once a Marine, always a Marine. If a Marine wants to distinguish between active and non-active, he or she may say “former” Marine, never “ex.” Unless dishonorably discharged, you’re NEVER an “ex” Marine.
Anonymousover 1 year agoI love the work and the quality of writing I was straight once, married. My boss was a former seven foot two inch Black retired NBA center. At an office party he got me drunk gave me some e. He told me he loved me and basically fucked me all fourteen inches of his long thick cock. My cock is nine inches and it was flying in circles spraying ropes of cum everywhere. I divorced my wife. James bought me EE fake tits and bubble butt enhancements. My adam’s apple and jaw line were softened. We are married I present as his milf. He likes me pegging him!!! I make him cum with my clit in his cunt.
Anonymousalmost 2 years agoGreat character development. Diana is a psychopath; starting to really like Helen. Interested to see what develops there.
service_proabout 2 years agoWow.
I honestly don't want to read anymore because I'm too emotionally invested in the characters and it feels like something REALLY BAD is about to happen...
Anonymousabout 2 years agoGreat story. Difficult to put down. Not often a read that stirs such emotions & yes, even tears
jrrtolkien420over 2 years agoThis is by far too 5 stories on this site. Excellent character development and story line. I don’t even care about the sex stuff. ( don’t get me wrong it’s hot) thanks for sharing.
Anonymousover 2 years agoYou're very good at making characters who read like real, complex human beings.
Anonymousabout 3 years agoA very good story. I can see all three aspects of the characters in me and it scares me. I will read your story until the end and report back to you. 5 stares so far.
Only_a_readerabout 3 years agoAs a reader, as my name says, i say that the best about long stories like this, is the plot. Just the plot can be the difference between win and failure. I thought it at the first chapter, but now that i reached third, i can say without any doubt, as a reader, that this is a 5 star story. I just want to be right till the end of the reading. Also, i'm a big futa fan
Anonymousover 3 years agoThis story is actually amazing. Great writing, amazing dialogue, fleshed out character. Holy shit
Anonymousover 3 years agoI hate diana so much. I feel for Kevin and Helen. This is such a good story.the only thing that throws me is some of the futa characters.i cant go for the sex scenes so far.im not into humiliation. That said I am very much looking forward the the next chapters
Anonymousover 3 years agoI love this story so much, this is my 3rd time rereading it. I came in here expecting porn but I got feelings and characters I genuinely care about, and porn.
Anonymousover 3 years agoExcellent character dev and world building, I'm looking forward to where you take this!
maxine2over 3 years agoExcellent! One of the few stories worth reading more than once. Please don't stop!
charmingcharles2896over 3 years agoSo we're adding verbal and mental abuse to rape on the list of Diana's abuses? Cool, she's the devil and I hate her, but I love this story so much.
WilddogDWabout 4 years agoGreat story! Very well written, with actual content, and story. Well done, please keep going!
Colonelinguistabout 4 years agoFor your own sake Allthings, I truly hope that you get published by one of the big boys like Random House or Scribner someday.
Literotica is probably a OK place to cut your literary teeth on. Back in the 40’s, some authors of fiction like Bradbury, A.C. Clarke and Theodore Sturgeon, struggled to be published in SF anthologies that were then consider trashy pulp fiction by a lot of assholes, and yet they bravely pressed on, and now of course, they’re legends.
And speaking of haters, I’ve read some of the negative comments you’ve received and it seems that some of those readers would Prefer stories without any political consciousness or think futa stories should only be about femsboys who just want Brutish sexual domination and humiliation. Your Two dimensional wack off crap, and that’s ok too, I guess.
What we have here though, is a story about prejudice. Prejudice against gays, against Blacks, and against all things futa. And I loved, by the way, Helen’s quote from Desmond Tutu about hate!
Chris7swabout 4 years agoI'm kind of sorry that I gave the first two chapters just 4 stars but I found the stories to be too violent and too rough to enjoy completely. However, I've persevered until I've now read this chapter as well and it's starting to grow on me as Kevin and Helen break the ice between them so I've happily given this chapter a full 5 stars.
All the way through the story so far the writing has been impeccable and of really high quality (especially compared with many within the pages of Literotica) and it's that that has encouraged me to read on and on... your writing is good; stirring and absorbing and has obviously benefited from some excellent proofreading and editing. It's been a great story to read so far (despite the way Kevin is treated) and I've especially appreciated the lack of grammatical and spelling errors as well as the smooth flow - well done indeed.
And finally now some light is starting to shine - possibly even some love - because I don't like Kevin being so much the underdog. Oh, I'm not expecting him to suddenly become top dog instead but this chapter has added a turn for the better and it was great to read.
I note that there's another 10 chapters to read and if they're as good as this and the preceding chapters then expect lots more stars.
Thank you for an excellent story
ajdehooghabout 4 years agoThis has been a good story so far. I think I'm seeing how you are setting things up...but looking forward to the further chapters!
Anonymousover 4 years agoWhile reading pornographic literature is something I don't really like myself doing, this is in part highly erotic while also being sensitive.
If I am being manipulated, so be it - a least it's a highly polished process & I hope the author graduates to deeper (& socially acceptable) & more remunerative topics.
Thank you.
Daddy0596almost 5 years agoDude I m waiting for perfect couple to get married
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoI think it’s fair to say that erotica has a fame for being too much action and very little story.
I wanted to say this is “balance”, but I think it’s a disservice saying that... It has so much of both and so much MORE. A hot, HOT story with characters that feel like real people. Real. People. With strengths, weaknesses and personality.
I love it. I really do. I don’t remember the last time I was so eager to read a story more and more. The pages just fly by...
Thanks to everybody involved in the production of this series. You are all amazing.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoWell this is the second 🥈 time I am reading this series and I love it
blade_rocknutover 5 years agoI had a bit of a tough start, not being in the "futa" loop, per se. However, the story has been exceedingly well written and the characters well developed, to the point that I'm now clamoring for the vile Diana to receive her come-uppance, and the well intentioned Kevin to be appreciated by someone(s). Though I've avoided futa and other...shall we say "not plausible" stories prior, your writing may make a fan of me yet.
MissSarahluvover 6 years agoI have truly enjoyed reading the Family Issues Series. It is a nice treat to follow the characters that you have created, they all have such depth. Your story is original and I believe you are a very gifted Writer. I look forward to finishing this series and reading some of your other stories. It is the early hours of the morning and I have spent the night inthralled with your characters and the captivating story line.
So thank you it has been an absolute delight
Warmly Miss Sarah Luv
BigStrongRhinoover 6 years agoHopefully Helen’s date doesn’t go as planned so she can take Kevin from Diana
Anonymousover 6 years agoThe fallacy that you imply generally does exist. When we encounter something this offensive, we generally avoid it. I'm comfortably different from most people in that I find it immoral to rate something that I have not read. Thus, everyone who has read your story up to this point, doesn't enjoy rape.
Forto02over 6 years agoThat character has become annoying.
By the time I'm reading this story, it has been allready finished, so I have no influence on the outcome of the story, but...
I really hope Diana is excluded soon.
Omnipotent_One_777over 6 years agoI hate Diana. She is such a self centered bitch. (Nice job on her character design. You make it sound like a real life story.)
masteraaronh74almost 7 years agoLike the story, kevin needs to grow a pair
Diana needs to be arrested for rape.
Anonymousabout 7 years agoYour plot and character development are unsurpassed. I didn't even know what Futanari was before embarking on this journey, but you've embodied the concept thoroughly well. At this point I'm reading the story more for literary value than erotic, but there's nothing wrong with that.
The more I read of Diana, the more I despise her; she's a selfish, delusional cunt. Sadly, there are women out there like Diana who misuse their feminine wiles, take advantage of good men, and always get their way as long there's someone around to put up with them.
Helen on the other hand, had me from Page 1 by her wit alone. The more I learn of her, the more endearing she becomes in my eyes; for some reason, it reminds me of how a fine wine improves with age. I was very pleased that she and Kevin were finally able to set things right. I really hope they end up together, as they are much more deserving of each other.
And I hope the story continues well beyond the chapters currently posted.
xxjannabout 7 years agoI know it's about the sex... but... the character development is some of the best I've read and the dialogue is too. Entirely believable despite the over arching surreal nature of the setting/culture/characters.
Keep going. I will. Now on to the next chapter!!
Anonymousabout 7 years agoDidn't check here for a couple of weeks just to give the next chapter time to post and came back to not one but two new chapters! On to chapter 4 :D
Anonymousover 7 years agoWhen you list phobias in an accusatory way, one after another, all I can picture in my head is a rambling HRC. Not the best image for this story.
Otherwise great work.
Anonymousover 7 years agoIt there were no breasts involved, this would STILL be rape and abuse. Resubmit this in its correct catagory.
Anonymousover 7 years agoLove the way your characters grow. I love your attention to detail. Can't wait for the next chapter
shawn410over 7 years agoIf there was any story that I wait for it's yours. You know how to latch on and keep me hooked. The character development it's top notch and the sex scenes are steamy. Great work. Can not wait for the next chapter. Much love
Anonymousover 7 years agoThe story keeps getting better! I'm looking forward to whatever you have in store for your characters. Like others, I loathe Diana as an abusive narcissist who never seems to do anything wrong (in her mind, of course, but also with her enabler, Helen, and even Kevin, whose tenderness and submissiveness are mixed with some masochism). It's an intriguing plot that also says a lot about this type of fiction and abuse in general. I'd like to see Helen have a great date, because maybe Kevin isn't the one she's meant to be with? I'm ready for anything and can't wait to enjoy the next chapter!
stanleysfanover 7 years agoWhen Helen wrote the letter to Kevin, and when Diana told she would be improving, this story far exceeded the range of sex stories. I admire it , with all my respection
Anonymousover 7 years agoAgain, you’ve outdone yourself with that perfect blend of comedy with erotica. Please please upload many chapters of this story. And I absolutely adore the characterisation of Helen, how she is fighting with her inner demons as well as outer ones. My heart goes out to her.
Keep up the good work. :) :)
Anonymousover 7 years agoDude the story is really really good. Keep it up with The good work, wish we have many chapters to Come.
Anonymousover 7 years agoThis is an amazing blend of sexy smut and encaptivating storyline. I hate and love Diana so much, free Kevin soon please!
Anonymousover 7 years agosuch insightful writing .you have hooked another reader most thoroughly . please keep posting here, 'cause i'm trans and this speaks to me on many levels. thank you heaps.
Fibaroover 7 years agoOnce again you have managed to amaze me with your story. The characters, the sex it is all just perfect. I would like nothing more that I give you Some constructive feedback but I cant. You have really mastered the art of writing and I cant find anything else than praise for you. I postphoned Reading this chapter for as long as I could just to make the wait for the next one a little shorther. I am hooked.
Anonymousover 7 years agoTo put it simply, this work has has to be the best erotica I've read as of late. The direction, pull, and distinct plot has me drawn in, inexplicably.
I am dreadfully invested in the story, and I have already numerous predictions lined up.
Most of all, I appreciate the character depth, which makes me empathize, sympathize, and, of course, dislike certain characters. (Diana.) It seems to me that this level of depth is what drives the best parts of the story forward. I desperately enjoy the new perspective into what one may consider quite an "abusive" relationship. It's a breath of fresh air.
I will also say, above all else, I hope that the vision you have as the author is not muddled through criticisms or any plea's for other content. From other comments, it seems the audience has grown tired of Diana, and is expecting the pace to drastically increase. Perhaps that's to be expected of an erotica site. However, I wouldn't let it concern you.
While I have found myself getting frustrated with Diana's constant mistreatment of Kevin, it seems clear that it all has a purpose, and I hope it leads to a conclusion *you*, as the author, find satisfying.
Thank you for taking time out of your day to read my thoughts, and I hope they assist in whatever fashion you've need of your audience.
Please continue,
Anticipatory Reader Anonymous.
Anonymousover 7 years agoAt his point the story is so good I read it like a book. I check back in every day just hoping to see if it’s there. This is by far the best thing I’ve ever read on this website, thank you so much
Anonymousover 7 years agoI love the the story & would like to see Helen & Kevin together (age does not matter) The sister is a real Bitch & should hook-up with someone else. Helen & Kevin both have feeling for each other but are not very good at expressing them. Patiently waiting for next chapter. Thanks
Anonymousover 7 years agoI really hope Kevin gets pounded by Helen in the next chapter! I really like how the interactions between the both are evolving! Great job, overall!
Anonymousover 7 years agoI think the sex and the plot are off the charts and I would love to be Kevin!
Anonymousover 7 years agoHoping Kevin gets pounded by Helen and Ginger in upcoming part/s of this series.
Anonymousover 7 years agoI think you've done a superb job in writing this story, most people likely came for the sex and stayed for the plot. Not trying to say that you're erotica is bad but perhaps if you are intending to make this more of a story then a erotic series for people to get off to, then maybe it would better to put a disclaimer on the front page saying so. Once again, not trying to tell you how you write your stories, that's all up to you but personally I feel that you could go a little more in depth into the Futa on male parts. It feels rather repetitive that Kevin is constantly doing it with Diana. Perhaps it is time to introduce something more, like Kevin forcefully being pulled into bed by Nadine? Is that her name or Ginger? Yeah, just trying to say I (and maybe some others) would like more erotica in the novel. Once again, I think this is an excellent story, great plot and your writing is superb. Please consider writing a short novel, you are much better than many erotic novel authors. Regards, Mike
Anonymousover 7 years agoi'm usually is not into futa stories more shemale(/transsexual) stories but i think this actually tops my favorite story of them all.
Anonymousover 7 years agoBut I'm waiting for Diana to realize she's not exactly queen shit of fuck mountain. She's very clearly mentally unstable.
Anonymousover 7 years agoI think this is a beautiful story. I didn't come in here expecting this but I finished it in tears. Human beings such as myself are fragile and we do try our best to be brave for the world. I think it is incredibly difficult to be kind after seeing how much callousness the world is capable of. It takes more courage then than ever before. I think you've captured that really well. I think you have a real gift for it. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Anonymousover 7 years agoI'm loving the character development but I'm so emphatically frustrated with the situation of duress Kevin is in. The character writing is good enough to me that the sexual parts are honestly coming in second place.
EzDemon187over 7 years agoBeen waiting for this for a while. Can't wait for the next chapter. 10 out of 10.
Anonymousover 7 years agoI pretty much never comment. Your writing is fantastic. It's capturing, interesting and super hot. Please keep writing. And when your done with this story, write a heap more.
Anonymousover 7 years agoI've been waiting for Part 3, and it's finally here! Great job!
Anonymousover 7 years agoWow, erotica with great sex and an amazing story to boot! I can think of nothing negative other than the story is so interesting it actually distracts from the sex!
Ok, i lied, my one personal, gripe of your worldbuilding is that all your shemales are amazons and ALMOST all of them seem to have little to no fear of using physical violence to get what they want with no worry of retribution of any kind. They are alpha predators, sure. They just are not very smart or subtle alphas. Introducing a few other shemales that think with their brains AND their cocks would be add a little more variety (and of differing sizes, you can still have a huge cock and be physically intimidating if you are short, average or tall. It just takes a little more work)
No matter what, I eagerly await your next chapter and hope you have a LONG and HARD future for this epic story you have so generous to share with us!
Anonymousover 7 years agoI started this story expecting another simple and heavily sexual futa on male story and ended up getting so much more.
This is a fantastic, very well written piece of work (so witty), which is quite rare for an erotic online story, and it gets better with every new chapter.
I loved how you developped the characters, they're relatable and human, which makes the abusive relationship between Kevin and Diana even more frustrating and painful to read !!
I hope he ends up with Elen, although it doesn't seem to go that way so far.
Thanks for this great story and keep up the good work !
Anonymousover 7 years agoThis story has to be one of the best written stories on this website, the character development is second to none whilst also still giving us the dose of smut we all crave. Love your work and hope this story never finishes. My favourite story done by my favourite author.
Anonymousover 7 years agoI hope he dosent take her shit for much longer i get the feeling hes gonna end up with helen i actually hope he does i really hate the bitchy sister
cuzimhavingagoodtimeover 7 years agoThe dynamic you've created with the abusive relationship is something not a lot of authors have the balls to depict, and I commend you for it.
Anonymousover 7 years agoVery good story. I enjoy the smutt but don’t even care about it anymore, too engrossed in the characters. Please keep up the good work. And please don’t let this story just die unfinished. Give it an ending when you are done with it. Just not too soon.👍
Anonymousover 7 years agoI've loved all 3 parts of this series and am looking forward to the next part. The plot is actually interesting. I'm also rooting for Helen and Kevin
Anonymousover 7 years agoI think the story is fantastic! I find the characters believable, and I'm truly on the edge of my seat in hopes you continue your tale!
Anonymousover 7 years agoI'm really looking forward to the next party of the story. I've spent a lot of time on this website and it's too the point where I'm looking for good stories and often skim through the sex. I'm very entertained by this story keep it up please.
mortlover 7 years agoI really love the story so far. Great story. Can´t wait for more from Helen. Helen and Kevin would make a great couple, I´m rooting for them.
Anonymousover 7 years agoI really like the pace of this and the fact that the sex, really isn't the main focus or theme of it all. Sure it's there, and though shorter than what many on here may be looking for, it still gets me going a bit. At this point though, those scenes are just a bonus or the icing on the cake and I'm so looking forward to the next piece. Keep up the good work!
HColeoSover 7 years agoLoving the paceing and writing of the story, very excited to see where this all goes! You have a fan in me!!
