All Comments on 'Just a Quickie'

1. Write about dressing up like a bimbo.

2. Add the angle of going to the store.

3. Meet a guy,

4. Pretend his cock is a popsicle.

5. Post it as if you really accomplished something.

Fact: all you did was write crap others wrote better and more cleverly in the past.

It's easy to make nasty comments when you're hiding behind 'Anonymous' - especially when you don't have the balls or talent to do any better. If you don't like the story, move on Jackass!

But I enjoyed it for what it is, a quickie! Thanks lorenqt!

...Hundreds of stories on Literotica ...Loren writes pretty damned well ...maybe she's the one that writes it better than everyone else... ever think of THAT Aninnypus? Keep on writing Loren, we love you. Cheers! --- Josie

I loved this story , I hope you have a follow up

What a maroon! Attacking someone for criticizing a lousy story (and that's just what this is) because the commenter hid behind the term "anonymous" when the other person is also hiding behind it. Go blow dead bears, mate!

seems to be the only way some people can feel good about themselves and frankly I feel a little sorry for the people that do so. Anonymous or not, it's easy to criticize an others work to make yourself feel better, but it's quite another thing to provide constructive criticism for other aspiring amateur writers who are clearly just doing this for fun.

Here is an example for those who may need one:

Lorenqt, I enjoyed your story, however I thought I would give you a pointer that might improve on it. It seems like your changing from past tense to present tense in a couple of spots in the middle of the story.

Example: He comes in right behind me and locks the door. He said, "Hey, I'm sorry about my wife's comments, she can be a real bitch sometimes."

The first sentence is present tense but the next is past. It can be a little distracting for the reader. All in all though I though it was pretty good. Loved the line about having the hamburger and chicken now you needed the sausage! Nicely done!

See? I didn't have to tear anyone down and was able to sandwich my criticism in between compliments on what I did like about the story. This way we build people up instead of knocking them down and encourage everyone to improve their writing skills through education and sympathy for your fellow writer and human being.

Lastly just so the author knows, you can delete any comments you want to. To do this log on to your account and go to your account control panel then click 'Submissions' then 'View' then on the story in question click on 'Moderate Public Comments'. From there you just click the link that says 'Delete the above comment'.

I hope this helps and please keep writing!

It's not a Trans/CD story. There's ONE sentence that mentions that the character is "not a real girl". That's got to be a turn off for those who came looking for cross dressing.

...Its more than that, and yes, you can go zipping thru all my stories and set them to ones (which they did right after I put my other comment in, thanks BTW, my girls will gradually bring them back up, they get overblown anyway). No, this is 'about' the transgendered trying to write out their innermost thoughts and feelings... to be 'seen' in a protected place, yet able to say what they really feel needs to be said. I don't give a damn if it was a single sentence. Loren writes here because she knows she can say what she wants to, what she said (and obviously some were NOT listening/reading) was just because she likes to dress sluty, doesn't mean she's a prostitute. So she said it here... she said it pretty well, and sexily I might add... yes, could use slight editing, but what story here really doesn't including my own. There are several things I see as sad on this site, this penchant for attacking new TG authors that are at least trying to provide worthy stories is one of the ugliest, especially in this category.

If authors can't accept negative comments on their work, then they shouldn't post it. It's that simple. This site accepts anonymous comments for a reason. How many are going to put their real names up here? I think the story was awful and Joscelyn, I don't give a shit if you like it or not and we don't need your "lessons" on how to critique. If your stories are have as mediocre as this one was, I wouldn't waste five seconds reading it.

I thought this story was OK. Not great, but not bad. It was an arousing story of reasonable technical quality, but it seemed a bit rushed and shallow. There is little description of either the narrator or her sexual partner. The description of the sexual activity is brief. Overall, I cannot immerse myself in this story the way I could with lorenqt's previous story (which was excellent, by the way). I too liked the sausage double entendre.

P.S. I was not originally planning to comment on this story, but chose to do so in order to provide a demonstration of neutral feedback and how to comment without trying to starting a flame war.

And it was really more about civility but apparently you missed that as well. I dont understand why anonymous feels like she has to be so nasty and hateful, but you get what you give. I feel sorry for her really, but especially feel bad for lorenqt who has to deal with this issue in her comments.

For my turn, I pity Pierce Hawthorne.

There is a BIG difference between critiquing a story and bashing it for the excersize. Most of the time I run into a story I am not fond of, I just move on. I guess some people just have to be nasty and leave a lasting impression.

Thank you ;)

A nice fun little story, thank you.